1. Compound – Black smoke poured out of the chimneys of the sadness factories and hung over the cities like bad news . Complex – In the north of the sad city stood mighty factories in which (so I’m told) sadness was actually manufactured , packaged and sent all over the world, which never seemed to get enough of it.
2. Black smoke hung over the cities. Sadness was sent around the world from the mighty factories.
3. Black smoke poured out of the chimneys of the sadness factories and hung over the cities like bad news
noun – factories verb – poured/hung preposition – over noun phrase – Black smoke poured out of them.
EXT: In the north of the sad city stands mighty factories in which (so they are told) they manufacture, package and send it all over the world, which never seems to have enough of it. Black smoke pours out of the chimneys of the sadness factories and hangs over the city like bad news.
January 27, 2015 at 8:30 am
Well done Callum – you’ve shown that you have a fair understanding of grammar and I’m pleased that you attempted the extension.
Targets:
1) Look at your answer for number two – how does splitting the complex sentence into two simple sentences change the tone of the story?
2) Re-read the extension answer you have written – how might you make your meaning clearer
3) Why not aim to achieve the parsing badge
http://achieve.community.edutronic.net/stage-one-reading/parse/
March 12, 2015 at 2:34 pm
The subordinate clause would be too vague on its own.